MaluPhetNovels

My thoughts... Regarding the completion of Volume 1, I still feel there's more to fix. I probably hire an editor. But it shall happen after I got a work. Creating this novel came from many reasons. But the primary reason is my demon. I won't elaborate but the three main characters of the story are the three faces of my demon. This is also why I write the 1st volume this way. I want to build characters first, which to the expense of the suspense and stakes. My mistake. Reviewing the first chapter, the premise felt average at best. It was about a child who became interested in powers due to his neighbors' stories. Next, Sarah's unruliness and Jed's goal weren't explained why in the second chapter which is not necessarily a very interesting premise. Though Sarah's story was explained in the later chapters, this was where I felt shame. For me it was lacking in emotional aspect, lacking a single jolt. The one I'm deeply satisfied with was writing Ayill. I wan

  Chapter 24 – Motes of light … It was the stab that could kill anyone. It pinpointed one’s weakness and attacked it. Everything muted. The world stopped just for this moment. Then there was blood. Pshk. Life groaned. It was only a light wound. But it was the first time he had gotten injured. He was correct that the annoying ant wouldn’t be able to do anything. He also had the right to be indignant and curse out loud. Alas, he felt otherwise. The titanic entity trembled as he didn’t understand. There was clearly no threat to him, but he felt that he was really going to lose. He willed all of his tentacles to help him flew. This time panicky. Everyone forgot what they were doing. Even the Venerables. They let go of the pinned tentacles and watched Life ascending to the sky. Then, they also watched as the petite body falling to its ruin. Bang. Debris was crushed. Sarah, Jed and Ben, who also returned with everyone, hurried to his location. In the distance, Grimo was watching what’s happe

  Chapter 23 – Of that single stab … Ayill dropped the stiff body on his arms. He did it with tender care. Shadow covered his face, and it was hard to decipher. But when he raised his head, there was none of hatred. There was only peacefulness. “Traitor? So what! Demon??? SO, WHAT!!!” A startling Will gushed out from him. It was still in a gaseous state, but this was enough to startle many. The gigantic tentacle was already upon them, and the trio felt death looking straight at them. Yet, in one second, their jaw dropped right to the ground! “Unlucky Stab.” An immense hole appeared on the giant tentacle. Blood showered, and they observed that they were spared from becoming pancakes. They hurried to search for Ayill and saw the boy with black wings-like limb protruding on his back. It flapped and shot towards the sky. “Even if I’ll be killed for my actions or dissected as an experiment, I don’t care anymore.” “There is nothing important for me than the people who love me.” “And right n

  Chapter 22 – Ayisha and Ayizalea ***Long chapter ahead*** … Before Cloud Rider met Clown and Bobar, the people in the county were reeling in shock. Their eyes popped as they peered at the titanic entity perched in the sky. It was late at night, but it coated the sky with a tantalizing red color. In the center, a body, in the flower form, was floating. “Gasp.” The night became red. Stars looked like glaring eyes in the cover of darkness. A strong aroma pervaded, filling everyone with irresistible scent. Few weaker minds salivated and their back slouched. Their eyes immediately mesmerized by the seductive contours of its petals, like a lady’s maturity, a fruit one couldn’t help but wanting to bite. The petals preened, opening itself with grace and demur. After the flower completed its bloom, most people had glazed expression, obvious to those weaker in strength. “Huff. Wheeze.” Red and a hint of purple parted on top of the flower. Everyone took a deep breath, waiting for wh